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And if I taught you how to dream,
I learnt how to lose it all,
when the pure fallen just washed it all away,
when the dreams we had washed away.

Running in streams,
like coloured tears down your face,
when your hands open like wings
tattered and broken,
to take you away,
where my fingers splay out over the page,
wishing for dreams,
pouring soulrivers into the pages,
and hope, and hope, and hope.

When your hands open like wings
and your lips give life to death,
and hope, and hope, and hope.

Washed away, soaked and heavy, dragging along.

Still coloured the tears fallen down,
and hope and hope and hope
opens your hands like wings to fly again,
on hope, and hope, please hope.

When our former dreams come to haunt,
to phantom-torment.
Where was our angel-grace then?

After we taught you dreams,
we fell, we fell hard.

We don't kiss now,
we barely touch,
nessecities, a must, if that.

The wine we made, you drank,
sours in our mouths,
spat out it sinks into tainted earth,
where we trod.

And everything we said we'd lost,
found us again.

We didn't teach you dreams at all,
nay, we gave you our hope,
because you need it more then we.

And our hands open like wings,
the darkest carnival lights,
and sorry go round stops,
the wrong side of the track,
or losing it all.

And our hands open like wings,
and broken, we soar into the skies of rust,
of ruin, of wrath and wrack.

We taught you dreams and learnt how to fall,
the tainted earth our cradle for now,
feeding the rain with our tears and ruined wine.

And our hands close around our throats like wings,
as the last of our dreams soak into the afflicted soil.
©2007-2009 =SorrowBurn
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The sequel to "Teach them dreams."

Joy.
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:| i hate you, you damned talented mother fucker! :shakefist:
I think this is your best poem yet. We pour ourselves into our words with different intensities, and it feels like you gave your all here. It's beautiful.

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It is not our abilities that show what we truly are; it is our choices.
LOVE the repitition in this it works so well aloud!
:+fav:

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In vino veritas, nunc est bibendum. - In wine is truth, now we must drink.
"And our hands open like wings,
the darkest carnival lights,
and sorry go round stops,
the wrong side of the track,
or losing it all."


:aww: Wow, sweetheart. :hug: Just wow.

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Dancing is a perpendicular expression of a horizontal desire.
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Founder of ~ExiledPoetry - Staff in ~The-Last-Stanza - Member of *Apophysis and ~TheWord
i could never understand how to use repititon
when ever i tried it just sounded like poop
you though, my friend, make it work.
congrats

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"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:hug: amazing....truly amazing. I honestly have tears in my eyes :tears: (no joke) this is one of few poems that gives me even more conviction to try to change the world. You really can inspire people when u write like this.

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The gift of darkness comes from within
:hug: amazing....truly amazing. I honestly have tears in my eyes :tears: (no joke) this is one of few poems that gives me even more conviction to try to change the world. You really can inspire people when u write like this.

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The gift of darkness comes from within
I believe your hope has soured.

mine hasnt.

I wonder if my hope is enough for us both.

if there is an us anymore...
Is there?

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What? Oh I was just gonna go to the incinerator room. Y'know? Burn in the blessed flames of death.
WOW. The greatest muse is pain isin't it?

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"A rational person will not expect the world to conform around their ideas. They understand that they must conform to the conventions of the rational world. Therefore, all important breakthroughs are made by irrational people."

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