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Is there a place where shipwrecks die?
Where they disintegrate into the sands
down into nothing and the shifting tides of time?

For this is where you'll find me.
Amongst the wreckage of time,
slowly rotting from inside out.

Once proud, I sailed lifes seas.
I beat the unforgiving tides of sorrow.
I rendered the waves to my will.
But I hit the rocks of uncertainty,
And now I become the wreckage;

With insatiable hunger tearing me from inside out,
I'm gutted by poseidons unrelenting fury.
The hooves of his steeds batter my shell,
as all that was me is washed away.

My structure, slowly falling apart.
My driving sails in shreds and tatters.
I am becoming no more.

I am becoming one with the waters,
with the sands;

Till I too ebb and flow in the currents,
granular and un-meaning,
miniscule and forgotten.
©2005-2009 =SorrowBurn
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Submitted: December 14, 2005
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Self expression is best done in poetry but remeber: words can only borrow the feelings

Painting used for preveiw by Claude-Joseph Vernet

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well... i love this piece! the words you have used and the symbolism make it a brilliant read! i think its my new favorite of yours.

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Meow =^_^=

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Wow this is really good! Good work :)

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I love it, absolutely gorgeous, the timing of the sentences
and the development of one stanza into the other is quite nice.
As is the idea of time, while you talk of the past the present and what
will become of you. However as a note I think the second stanza
is weaker than the rest...but perhaps it is just because the first lines
are so brilliant!

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Regards,
Nemo_Outis
Yeah stanza 2... i'll rework it if i can

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Wit + Sarcasm X Misanthropy2 - Amiability + Charm =SorrowBurn

"And when it all came crashin' down, I became withdrawn and the only thing I knew how to do is to keep on keepin' on."
R.Z.
Thanks much

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Wit + Sarcasm X Misanthropy2 - Amiability + Charm =SorrowBurn

"And when it all came crashin' down, I became withdrawn and the only thing I knew how to do is to keep on keepin' on."
R.Z.
Whoa... that's like... a really powerful piece. I love it. =) Doesn't rhyme, but I don't mind, for the meaning behind it is awesome. Guess you're still in the 'down' mood of yours huh? :huggle: Cheer up, take your time though. =) I just... really love this piece. >< :+fav:

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You don't know me.
So don't act like you do.
Don't ask me either,
'Cause I too don't have a clue.

... Evelyn ...
I feel better oddly enough and i dont do rhymes :nana: amd so yeah im gettin better if slowly :hug: see you around

Thanks for the Fav

Ozz

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Wit + Sarcasm X Misanthropy2 - Amiability + Charm =SorrowBurn

"And when it all came crashin' down, I became withdrawn and the only thing I knew how to do is to keep on keepin' on."
R.Z.
Lol! Glad to hear that, Sir Ozzie! =D It's nice to see you smiling. XP See you around too dude! =)

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You don't know me.
So don't act like you do.
Don't ask me either,
'Cause I too don't have a clue.

... Evelyn ...
Very nice, and the image fits just great, seems like u got inspired by the picture, nice one^^

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:music:-[.Your words, bury me of what i used to be
I can't erase all those things I've seen.]-:music:

"...agh burzum-ishi krimpatul?"
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